So here’s the problem.
On the one hand, I’m getting all the info I need to write the rest of the book in the first chapter.
On the other hand, I like books with fast starts.
So I did some vicious cuts. I figured in the first scene I need Nita, Button, and Mort, with the set-ups of the new partner, the doughnuts, the Devil, and Joey. In the second scene I need Nick questioning Vinnie and taking the scupper from Rab, with the set-ups for the Hotels, the gate and missing agents. I’d like to get the smite in there, but it takes up a lot of story real estate. That gave me enough space to add in a vastly shortened third scene so Nita could meet Nick before Chapter Two.
I’m not sure if it’s better or not. It’s definitely faster, but . . .
Argh. It’s up there under Works in Progress, Nita’s First Chapter labeled “Vicious Cuts.” If you can stand to read it again, let me know if it’s better or worse. ARGH.