So after three people said they had a hard time keeping the names Dag and Rab straight, I knew I had to change them. Rab was too much a character for me already to change, but Dag was too non-Korean a name to work, so that was the one to change. Then I found out that most of the Korean demons were damp women, so I co-opted a Korean supernatural entity named Jeoseung, which made him Jeo. Jeo and Rab. Not the same.
And then I started rereading the first act and remembered that my murder victim was Joey. Jeo and Joey? No. So Joey had to change (he’s now Jimmy, close enough) but all of this is, of course, shifting characterization for me. Jeo seems smarter than Dag for some reason, and I always thought Dag was smart, so that’s odd. And Jimmy doesn’t seem as big as Joey was, although of course he is. Names, do not mess with them.
In other news, here’s your beta draft of Act One.. If you want to comment, tell me the stuff I need to fix and the stuff I need to keep, no rewriting. If you don’t want to comment, that’s good, too. Have a nice day.