So I’m rewriting the opening, trying to smooth out the cuts I made, and I realize that Nick is going to have to smite something because it’s referred to over and over again (and because it sets up the Rich scene later). But I don’t want to add much to the scene and I really like the one-two punch of the hellfire on the palm and then dropping the facade. So he smites something small in between those, only a second’s action, for a three-beat. It took me several minutes to figure out what and then to do the research, but I am a professional and I will spend minutes on things if it’s necessary. Like this:
This is the teddy bear that Nita’s grandpa put in the bar after she gave it to him when she was little. It’s not great looking, but come on, it’s twenty-five years old. Also, the one in the bar is really faded. Its name is Binky. Nick smites it which causes some bitterness. (“What the hell did that bear ever do to you?”)
I think this is the one that Nick replaces it with later:
Jennifer Crusie, professional writer since 1993.