Scene Revision: Liz vs. Aunt ML

So here’s something to practice on: a severely lacking scene from Lavender. Here are your beta reader questions for analysis:

Scene Critiques Questions (for Beta Readers)
Who is the protagonist? That is, who owns this scene? What is her or his goal?

Who is the antagonist? That is, who is the person causing the conflict in this scene; the person, who if removed from the scene, would cause the conflit to collapse?What is her goal?

What expectations does this scene create?

What must be kept in this scene?

What needs work?

And here’s the scene: Continue reading